banks Posted November 2, 2011 Report Share Posted November 2, 2011 24 hours later... what did you all think? Personally, I didn't like the extract or the poem as much as some I've written commentaries on in the past, but they weren't horrific. I chose the poem because I wasn't quite sure what was going on with the prose. What did you chose and what did you write about? Hope maths P1 went well, good luck for the rest Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gee :) Posted November 2, 2011 Report Share Posted November 2, 2011 (edited) 24 hours later... what did you all think? Personally, I didn't like the extract or the poem as much as some I've written commentaries on in the past, but they weren't horrific. I chose the poem because I wasn't quite sure what was going on with the prose. What did you chose and what did you write about? Hope maths P1 went well, good luck for the rest I think it could have been worse so I was happy enough.I chose the poem because I understood it and just like you, didn't quite know what the prose was about.IMO The poem was good and simple and I definitely think it will be the more popular choice. Edited November 2, 2011 by Gee :) Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
jonathan810 Posted November 2, 2011 Report Share Posted November 2, 2011 Could have been worse, but could have been a lot better Didn't see anything in the prose (dancing bear? ) So ended up with the poem. It was a nice poem, but I couldn't get much out of it (only about 5 sides of the paper ) Hope the examiner likes what i wrote Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
GeorgieC Posted November 3, 2011 Report Share Posted November 3, 2011 It was a nice poem, but I couldn't get much out of it (only about 5 sides of the paper I read Dancing bear once and didn't really get it then I read it later when I was done and I saw a lot in it. But I think I did well with the Poem I wrote about 5 sides too. I hope i went into enough depth with everything, that's probably the biggest weakness I have with commentaries. Oh well done now! Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
ChikkyD Posted November 3, 2011 Report Share Posted November 3, 2011 I did the poem too. I got halfway through Dancing Bear in perusal and gave up Read the poem about 3 times, and suddenly got it I did 5 or 6 sides, I can't remember. I hope it goes well Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezeh Posted November 3, 2011 Report Share Posted November 3, 2011 I ended up doing the prose. Made up some BS about dreams and reality; not my best effort, but I hope it turns out okay! Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bastian Bustamante Salkeld Posted November 3, 2011 Report Share Posted November 3, 2011 I never even read the poems lol The Dancing Bear was just about a murder a broken sense of reality... I talked about literary devices, ambiance, multiple changes of tone, everything, I think it's the best commentary I've ever done Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lewis Tan Posted November 4, 2011 Report Share Posted November 4, 2011 i should have done some practice before. i did the dancing bear, i should have done the poetry. i just felt like a challenge or i was just dumb lol, but i wrote some decent things, mostly about shifts in pace, tone, how it affected tension/atmosphere and how that was used by vanderhaeghe to position the reader. dancing bear symbolic of the blood clot in the Dieter's brain and death. my reading was about co-existing contrasts in unexpected situations, creatures, people. i didn't finish however... i spent 40 minutes plannning, 10 minutes over. in the end i wasn't able to start/finish a conclusion. Oh well! we still got paper 2 fellas... Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezeh Posted November 4, 2011 Report Share Posted November 4, 2011 i should have done some practice before. i did the dancing bear, i should have done the poetry. i just felt like a challenge or i was just dumb lol, but i wrote some decent things, mostly about shifts in pace, tone, how it affected tension/atmosphere and how that was used by vanderhaeghe to position the reader. dancing bear symbolic of the blood clot in the Dieter's brain and death. my reading was about co-existing contrasts in unexpected situations, creatures, people. i didn't finish however... i spent 40 minutes plannning, 10 minutes over. in the end i wasn't able to start/finish a conclusion. Oh well! we still got paper 2 fellas... No conclusion?! You're always best to cut your last paragraph short and write a conclusion, otherwise your presentation marks will suffer horrendously! 1 Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lewis Tan Posted November 4, 2011 Report Share Posted November 4, 2011 ^ oh thanks, ill remember next time i write a commentary nah it should be ok. at worst my presentation will drop to a three which is only one mark lower than usual. no point thinking about it anyway i got all the other exams and then i have to wait till jan for results Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Haasan Subà thasan Posted November 4, 2011 Report Share Posted November 4, 2011 I did the poem, thought it was very good compared to what i did in my trials.I spoke about the elements of music, paradoxical nature of light and dark and something else which i forgot lol..used plenty of techniques, so overall i was very happy! 9 to go haha Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
lizlien Posted November 4, 2011 Report Share Posted November 4, 2011 i did dancing bear, and i thought it was a really good passage - then again, i'm pretty much in love with anything which has an actual plot rather than long descriptions of places, since i always feel like i'm repeating myself when i get those. i spoke mainly about Vanderhaeghe's use of language switching from descriptive and long to short and chaotic and how it gave us a clear image of Dieter's mindset, as well as the purity of dreams versus the harshness of reality. i really hope it went well, because i'm aiming for a 7, or at least a very high 6. If anyone has any Paper 2 sample essays i would really love that, especially if they're on either Death of a Salesman, Doll's House, Hamlet or Translations! Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Schrödinger's Cat Posted November 5, 2011 Report Share Posted November 5, 2011 (edited) I did the poem. I found I could talk a lot about the nature of the strikingly human connection between the speaker and the blind mandolin player (and their necessities for each other), how the darkness of the tunnel is representative of his plight as a member of the alienated but, in turn, that the tunnel (and the darkness and emptiness) is what makes his music "resonate" in the heart of the speaker... blah blah blah. I think I read too deeply into it... probably my biggest weakness But it's over so MEH! I read the prose over once and was totally confused... I thought that the boy was suffering a stroke. But then I thought it was about murder. It was so confusing?! And what was the significance of the bear??? Edited November 5, 2011 by Schrödinger's Cat Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Schrödinger's Cat Posted November 5, 2011 Report Share Posted November 5, 2011 I understood it as the author's comment on our perception of our senses and life in general...it was perhaps a moral message of how a lack of something does not necessarily mean a flaw. like how the player's blindness is almost like a gift.... I know a lot of people who talked about escapism but i didn't pick up on that...Oh that's such a good way of thinking about it! And what's that about escapism? I didn't get that at all... =P Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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