ShootingStar16 Posted April 4, 2015 Report Share Posted April 4, 2015 So I'm working on my HI and I was wondering if this question is too broad: did western intrusion have more of an impact on the collapse of the Tokugawa Shogunate than internal factors? Like idk if I should narrow it down to more specific factors or if I should keep it that way. I found a lot of information on my topic, so that's good Any feedback is appreciated. Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
IbTrojan Posted April 4, 2015 Report Share Posted April 4, 2015 I think you should rephrase the question with "to what extent..." so that it sounds more confident. When I read it, I felt like you were uncertain rather than ready to argue your point. So maybe "To what extent was Western intrusion more impactful than internal factors on the collapse of the Tokugawa Shogunate?" 2 Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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